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Posted by: Weien Original: 1/27/2008 10:59 PM Views: 287 Comments: 4 eProps: 6 Read Comments Post a Comment Back to Your Xanga Site

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Sunday, January 27, 2008

(Influences: "Twilight" by Stephenie Meyer, II Timothy 1:7-8, recent personal experience.)
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Vampire's Sins

When you walked through that gust of wind
When my eyes turned you cerise-skinned
I breathed to heart
How your blood red
Made my throat ache
Made my mind dread

How you stepped slow but far too close
How your scent pushed me past eros
I seized my thirst
And pinched it down
I couldn't breathe
Or think, and found

That all that I could do was run
Away until my thoughts were done
With your allure
And I'd be sure
That this was love and I'd come to
The point where we would not kill you

What I did when I ran from here
What I saw in my kind of fear:
I thought of you
And hopelessly
Tried to forget
Your taste to me

But then I felt this psyche-flame
As if a Holy Spirit came
To burn me clean
And soundly heal
Me where I would
No longer feel

That all that I could do was run
Away until my thoughts were done
With your allure
And I'd be sure
That this was love and I could see
The point where we would not kill me

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Wow Weien! Tantalizing piece. That and a WONDERFUL use of Eros.

Posted 1/31/2008 10:09 PM by Fushikage - reply

I've never read Twilight--so perhaps I wouldn't be thinking this if I had, but parts of this really remind me of Genesis 39/2 Timothy 2:22. Very intense (strong verbs: seized, pinched) and, because of this, it has an almost gritty-honest feel about it that I can't quite put my finger on or explain... Mm...very fun to read!

RYC:
>>*gasps* Ahhh, the rhyme scheme! I really did miss it completely...[etc]
XD It really was quite accidental...at first. As I told Micah, when I started sketching the poem, I had the first two lines as one until I realized the first and last words rhymed...then I started having fun with it. By breaking each line in half, it hid it a little bit more, making my own, inventive rhyme- and meter-schemes less noticeable.

Anyway, thanks again for posting this [and the last several poems]. I promise more individualized comments for the latter in the future. ^_^ God bless.

Posted 2/5/2008 7:00 AM by NoCompromises - reply

This is a great piece. All artwork that make my fingers itch for the nearest pencil and sketchpad (or back of homework ^_^). It really is neat to watch an artist's skills grow as the artist grows. I hope that life and its Source continue to inspire.

~Ag

Posted 2/11/2008 7:36 PM by Iano169 - reply