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Sunday, August 10, 2008

 Decided to write this one day in spring when a classmate of mine in History of Ideas II (Roman and Christian thought) described to me how one of our texts -- Lucretius' On the Nature of the Universe -- was getting him down. The verses reference class discussions and sections from the text; the chorus references Roman writer Cicero's ultimate failure to "achieve" happiness despite his statements on the subject. Apologies for the messy, too-folksy vocals.
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Hey There Venus
(Click to listen/download -- Thanks, Victoria!)

(Book 1)
Hey there Venus, honey my glass
Filled with this wormwooded genius,  I'll feed to the class
Although you're high and mighty, on your unruffled clouds
But that's the same insighty that we're talking about

Yet these atoms and vacuums in their infinite field
With no purpose or center lack a certain appeal

(CHORUS)
(What I'm saying is) Lucretius
Please just
Leave us
Alone
(I know you want us all to) Be serene
But it remains to be seen
That you're any happier than Cicero

(Book 2)
Then there's this calc-based notion of matter and space
That's all a shameless promotion of your civil case
Where you relate your relativity and call it profound
But if we throw creativity from an uttermost bound

It either bounces or travels another ten feet
And either way we've got to admit defeat

(Book 4)
Of course you know that our senses cannot be denied
As clear as people with jaundice see through yellow eyes
So you'll deduce, if unconvincingly, the mind is to blame
Cause even optical illusions remain a brain game

Just know if licorice atoms cause your tongue misery
That your taste buds are telling the truth, yesiree

(Book 4/5)
Let's get this straight, you think that love is something we should avoid
But all your hauntings and heartaches sound a bit paranoid
And then your talk of self-deception and pretty rank paramours
Sounds more like bitter reminiscence of the ones who were yours

In the end this serenity's an unpleasant affair
What with those flimsy old goddesses who don't really care
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We've spoken about the main points of goodness, but I have to highlight the mandolin part in verse three. It cracks me up wonderfully! To my ears, it sounds like he's (yes, he sounds male) trying to find his voice the entire verse, but doesn't actually find it until the last few notes. It goes without saying that I love the abundance of text--four verses. I also think your doing quite nicely at developing your own style of singing. I've mentioned that mine is very characteristic: boring. But you have lots of personality. Perhaps, but hopefully not, it's a reflection of our deeper selves.

Just noticed "flimsy" for some reason...lol.

If I was to suggest something (which is a nice way of preparing you for what I'm about to suggest,) I'd encourage you to write some of it out on manuscript paper. It might clean up some of the "too-folksy" vocals. Though, the only time I wonder about their "too-folksy"-ness is on the first 6 notes of the chorus (i.e. what exactly are those pitches? Just a scale, or more?) Then again, maybe its all part of the style. I'm afraid I'm permanently scarred by the precision that classical demands. Can you believe I've gone all summer without a metronome? Scandalous, I know. I bought one today in preparation for my exodus on Thursday.

Eeek...a long comment...maybe I should have emailed.

But it's your turn, right? hehe
Posted 8/16/2008 5:25 PM by orangepassantino - reply


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